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Some people believe that building a massive stadium in a country generates a lot of profit for people who live nearby as well as those who live in remote areas in a state. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

People
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 have different views about whether or not building a substantial
stadium
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 in a country brings about huge earnings for
people
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 who live around including remote
areas
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.
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opinion
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 can be beneficial
for
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 some cases. I believe that building
enormous
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an enormous
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stadium
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 in
nation
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a nation
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 more provides disadvantages
instead
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 of gains. These days,
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governments keep pushing to
development
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sport
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areas
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 like
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stadium
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stadiums
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instead
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 of to giving
profit
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a profit
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. In fact, it just gives damages for
environment
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the environment
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, because
to build
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building
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 a
stadium
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larges
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area
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.
That is
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, many changes function either local
areas
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 or farming
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area
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 to
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stadium
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the stadium
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.
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, in my
country
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 some
of
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conflict
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which
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are caused eviction of land by the government, and some of
their
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them
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 have to
loss
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 their houses. In my view,
that
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building a massive
stadium
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sould
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should
could
 be considering many factors including
people
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’s
residence
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residences
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 and
environment
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the environment
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.
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,
in
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my opinion
about
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that argue build large-scale
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stadium
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stadiums
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 will be provided
a
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profit for
people
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 who live in nearby as well remote
areas
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, that it is
wrong
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a wrong
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 opinion, which exactly these just enjoyed by
businessman
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businessmen
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 or a big
investor
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investors
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. Because
,
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 they have a huge control
to
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over
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 their regulation.
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, small
trader
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traders
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forbidden
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are forbidden
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 to
sale
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at
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in
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 the
around
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area
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, they
afraid
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are afraid
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 many rubish
that
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stadium
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area
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. In conclusion, building a major
stadium
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not
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does not
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 give more revenue for the
people
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 who live
in
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nearby
as well as
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they
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those
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 who live in remote
areas
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. In fact,
that is
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 just
damage
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damages
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the enviroments
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enviroments
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environments
environment
,
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 and only certain
people
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 who get
benefit
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the benefit
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for
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 the project.

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