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Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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There is still debate regarding the contribution of
taxes
 to the country's
development
.
While
 some people believe that
taxes
is
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 very crucial, yet, others feel that considering other' responsibilities is more important
that
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than
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 paying any
taxation
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. There are arguments on both sides,
however
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 which we will discuss here. On the
on
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 hand, the proponents of the tax payment said that contributing
on
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 public
financial
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 through
taxes
 will enhance essential national and local developments
such
 as education, economic
development
 and health care. The country
also
 can provide financial support for building public schools, health-related providers, and public infrastructure via public incomes.
In addition
, the
increasing
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 of public incomes through taxation could admittedly increase public expenditure which is
the
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 indicator of national
development
. If the expenditure became high, the public capabilities to improve their needs would be increasing as well.
On the other hand
, the opponents of
these kind
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 of payment
argues
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 that tax would give negative short and long-term effects on corruption.
For instance
, in developing countries like Indonesia, government income from
taxes
 had been used for
personal
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 interest of
elite
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, which usually exararcebates corruption.
Therefore
, many views agreed that tax would lead to
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an inneffective
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inneffective
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ineffective
 function. Despite
this
, some views proposed that paying
taxes
 can be refocused on another important field
such
 as giving personal help directly to needing people and providing CSR from business
corporation
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.
Overall
, in spite of its positive effect on the
economical
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, educational and health
development
, it remains many problems.
Thus
, it seems to me that providing money for another aspect other than
taxes
 is worth implementing.
This
 is provided that our spare
of
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money is used to help
for
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public's
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the public's
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 needs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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