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Gender equality has not been achieved in our society. Women still do not have the same rights and opportunities as men. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, gender
equality
 is still the main issue in
this
 society.
Women
 do not have the same opportunity as
men
 in many aspects. I totally agree that gender
equality
 has not been achieved in
this
 modern era for two reasons. The main reason is
women
 still have limited occupation choices. In
this
 age, many companies required more
men
 than
women
.
However
, it is because they can not trust females' abilities in work life.
For instance
, one of the biggest companies in Java does not want to hire a woman. It is because the company felt that it will be unbeneficial for them
due to
 the ineffective way caused by
women
.
As a result
, females still struggle with finding jobs. The following reason is a limited chance to get an
education
. In some places, the chance for taking higher
education
 is not the same for both
men
 and
women
.
Men
 are getting more opportunities in formal
education
. For illustration, many families choose to send their sons to go to the city in order to get a college degree.
However
,
women
 tend to stay at home doing the house works.
Consequently
, the rate of
women
 taking a higher
education
 is still low.
To sum up
,
equality
 between females and males still become a problem in some countries.
Men
 have a bigger opportunity to become successful in academics and jobs.
In contrast
,
women
 still have a limited chance to get higher
education
 and better jobs. Sex
equality
 needs to get more attention from the government and society in order to improve the balance position of
women
 and
men
 in society.
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