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The process illustrates the several stages of preparation of the honey in moderate-scale trading output.

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The process illustrates the several stages of preparation of the
honey
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 in moderate-scale trading output.
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,
this
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 process is divided into two phases as bee
phase
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 and the human
phase
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. It gives information from gathering nectar to packing up the jars onto the counters of the malls.
The first step is
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 started with the bee
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.
Honey
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 bees gather the nectar from the flowers, and
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 they deposit the collected nectar into their honeycombs. The
honey
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 was dried by using wings as a fan. In fact, bees are very tidy and pure insects so they keep cleaning each cell. The
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 of the bee
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 is when the
honey
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 is sealed in the cells through using of wax. Gathering honeycombs is the initial stage of the human
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, and
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 combs are pressed to take the pure and raw
honey
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 through the hole. After that specific heating machines participate. A filled bucket was poured into the sump tank which could include a huge amount of
honey
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. Having heated approximately 45-50 Selsey degrees, the dirt was removed in the process in the sieve tank. The hot
honey
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 is kept in the setting tank for 2-4 days, and there is a faucet to pour the ready
honey
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 into the jars. Labelled jars are delivered to the stores.

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