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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of animal experimentation

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Nowadays, a majority of
people
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medicine
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 or beauty things, in daily life. but not all of them know that
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this
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 goods test on
animals
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. Some of the opinions
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 mind
of
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this
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,
while
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 others
against
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 it. In
this
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 essay, I will explain
positive
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the positive
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 and negative sides of testing
medicine
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 on
animals
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. The main
advantages
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 is helps
to
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researchers
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 find drugs and treatment aids
researchers
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 can test their
medicine
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 on
laboratory
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rats
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 and find unhealthy effects without hurting
people
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.
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,they can find
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 portion of drugs which will not damage
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 health.
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, it helps to find how many times
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for
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 overcome the disease. The second advantage is
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the similarity
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people
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between people
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 and
laboratory
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rats
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, which helps to clearly find
solution
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 for overcome disease. It provides
chance
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a chance
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 to check how
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medicine
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 on
people
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 without involving
people
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,
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. can he
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in
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 their
medicine
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.
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 The main disadvantage is
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the costs
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costs
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cost
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 of tests.Factories which spend enormous amount of money
for
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 experiment can use
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 money
for
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 develop other area which leads
do
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to
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this
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 disease
such
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 as ecology, education and poverty.In brief, irrational spending of money for experiments. The
last
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 disadvantage Of testing drugs on
animals
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animals
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 are killed or kept in captivity.
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rats
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 have feelings
as
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people
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,
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 and
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researchers
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threat
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 them in a bad way.
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,
animals
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 want to live but
researchers
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 take their chance to live.
This
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 is because
according to
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 statistics
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rats
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 do not survive after four or three tests.
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, aids
researchers
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 should give opportunities for
animals
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 to live.
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 there are numerous pros and cons of animal testing, the ethical aspect over
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shodan
 both of them,

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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