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Most people believe that stricter punishments should be given for traffic offenses. To what extent do you agree?

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Transportation is the most important factor in the world .Road transportation systems are the most valuable factors for humans .
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 system we can divided manly two sections which is Privat and Public , anyhow both ways very important to our life.
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 some drivers have handled their vehicles to violent rules and regulations and it is dangerous to others' lives ,which is roads using people and animals .I m totally agree with stricter punishments should be given for
traffic
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 violations.
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 we can analyze data from
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 year on how many peoples and animals died and serious injuries
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 an accident.Most accidents are caused to violation of driving rules and regulations,
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 as per Health organization reports most accidents occurred
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 high alcohol use and driving in vehicles .
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 is more damage to lives and properties , and
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 an unnecessary cost for the government to maintain health facilities in the country.
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 money can use for other essential services
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 as education or child care. If peoples are in violation of rules and regulations occurred to high traffics on the roads ,
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 wastes time for people and it affects any country's economy because workers more time wasting only on transportation.Another hand lot of
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 caused air pollution because of more fuel consumption , which is
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 an unnecessary cost I strongly believe that strict need for laws and punishments for violation of
traffic
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 laws. ,
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 punishment will reduce
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 violations and penalty money can use for other maintenance of the country .
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