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Today, more and more people use robots to do task at home and at work, do u think it is a positive or negay develop? Why?

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 of technology is becoming increasingly popular amongst
people
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. Nowadays, a large number of
people
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 prefer the
use
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 of
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robot
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robots
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 at home
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their
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at their
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 place of
work
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, in my opinion, it is a positive development as the positivity outweighs the
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 impacts because it saves
energy
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as well as
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time
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. My points will be
further
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 explained in the forthcoming paragraphs. Machines are devices that are created by humans to make
work
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 easier,
therefore
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, the development of
of
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robot
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robots
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 used by
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people
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 is a means of saving
energy
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 as robots perform tasks that are supposed
be
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 carried out by humans thereby saving
people
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 from
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stress
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the stress
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 that could make them
to
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be worn out. Most
of
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the
illness
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of
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nowadays are linked to
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, deriving and another means to
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alleviate
 and reduce
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 is a good development as
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 will reduce the rate of illnesses caused by
stress
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.
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, a woman who has just
put
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 to bed and has no relative or helper around her could venture into the
use
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 of
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robot
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a robot
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 to run errands for her around the house thereby saving her conserving her
energy
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 for taking care of her baby.
Energy
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 is
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request
 in carrying out all activities as
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a robot
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robot
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robots
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 could save
such
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energy
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 from
be
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 exhausted.
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, management of
time
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 is required in achieving tasks, the
use
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 of
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robot
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robots
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 helps to
safe
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time
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 as
people
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 could result
into
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 role conflict if there is no help in carrying out their daily activities.
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Robot
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Robots
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heloi
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help
work
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 to be done faster,
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, a boss at
work
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 who has many roles to carry out
such
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 as monitoring of
staffs
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, verification of documents etc can assign one or two of these roles to be carried out by
robot
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 so as to safe
time
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 and have several works to be done within a short period of
time
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 thereby increasing productivity.
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,
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robot
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the robot
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 has its own disadvantages as it requires maintenance and
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create
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 unemployment.
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, the creation of
robith
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 which is a positive impact has
save
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 a lot of
people
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 from physical and mental drainage as robots
helps
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 them to save their
energy
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,
in addition
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, it
also
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 ensures tasks are been carried out faster which results
into
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 effectiveness in delivery of services.

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