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The graph below shows electricity production(in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012

The graph below shows electricity production(in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012
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The line graph shows four kinds of powers produced in
terawatt
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hours
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 during the period of 32 years.
It is clear that
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 Nuclear
power
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 provided the most
electricity
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 over the past 32 years.
On the contrary
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, the other three powers remained stable in
power
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 provision. In the year 1980, it shows the Thermal
power
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 provided the highest
power
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 of 120
terawatt
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 hour. what's more, both Nuclear
power
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 and Hydroelectric
power
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 supplied almost the same, which provided around 70
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terawatt
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terawatt-hours
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hours
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 for each. Renewables
power
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 provided the lowest
electricity
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 produced. During the period 1980 to 1981, the
electricity
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 of Nuclear
power
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 extremely increased from 50
terawatt
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 hour to 100
terawatt
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hours
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, and it gradually became the highest
power
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 producer. In the year 2005, the graph indicates that Nuclear
power
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 reached the peak of
the
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electricity
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 provision.
Instead
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, Thermal
power
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 production decreased from the year 1980 and remained around 50
terawatt
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hours
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 during the
last
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 25 years. Similar to Thermal
power
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, the
power
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 produced by Hydroelectric stayed around 70 to 80
terawatt
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hours
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.
Besides
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, Renewables
power
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 had only a small rise to 25
terawatt
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hours
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 by 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words terawatt, hours, power, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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