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Students today can access information online ,so libraries are not necessary .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
Since
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 centuries
libraries
 have been in the service of people .These
libraries
 are storehouse of
never ending
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 knowledge known as
books
 .Some people consider that we can do away with traditional
libraries
 because technology has given us the facility of virtual or online
libraries
.But I believe that even though technology has
lessen
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our need to go to the
libraries
 , our traditional
libraries
 can never become unnecessary There is no doubt that today most students try to find
easier
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 way to study and so that they look for some information from online websites .To add
this
 way
more
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cheaper
also
for example
 if you want to read something you can search online and read anywhere.
However
 one should keep in mind that a person goes to a library not only to search and get information from
books
 but
also
 to sit and study there. The ambience and the peaceful and good atmosphere of the library help one to concentrate more on one's work and study .
Thus
libraries
 never become unneeded . So their role is more important for society. Another vital point is that it is very difficult to always read
books
 from the computer monitor. Traditional
books
also
 can be accessed only by those who are computer screen .
for instance
this
also
 causes some health problems .
To conclude
 .No doubt today virtual
libraries
 becoming be of the public eye but the importance of the
libraries
 for their fundamental role cannot be put aside .So each library should provide good quality
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facilities for readers so
then
 more and more people access them.
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