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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

#technology #fullness #time #classroom #teachers
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 become globally recognised and accepted. It seems that soonest, educational preceptors will be replaced by artificial intelligence. I choose to differ from the above point of view because learning is interactive and requires social skills. Each student is different and may require a different approach
of
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 teaching to understand a particular concept and technological devices lack the ability as they only deliver whatever they have been programmed to.
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, a robot may not
able
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 to relate to the fact that the student
maybe
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 psychologically
imbalance
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due to
 stressors from the home which will hamper his academic progress
due to
its
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 lack of social skills.
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 will hinder
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teacher-student bonding leading to poor academic performance by the student. Again, the concept taught in school were developed by humans and it will require a human to adequately and successfully teach the concepts.
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,
concept
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 around medicine and surgery, human history and archaeology all require human participation to successfully deliver these concepts. In conclusion,
however
 advanced technologies
becomes
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,
it
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 cannot completely erase human
out of
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 the educational system.
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academics requires social skills and human input to successfully deliver concepts to students
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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