Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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The
recnet
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recent
trend of using alternative medicines and treatments
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on
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the rise
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among
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whom
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are suffering
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issues.
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, these methods are not directed by their usual doctors. I think
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this
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is a negative development rather than a positive based on
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I mentioned below. To support my thought, I want to mention the
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Government
of Ontario's advertisement to advise
people
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to see their medical professional for help rather
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than depend
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on online suggestions by some non-qualified person.
People
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tend to explore the quickest possible solution
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and often fall for
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bad
advise
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.
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, spiking up their health problems.
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,
people
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are investing their time and money
looking
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in looking
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for
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pro tips in optimum time. My friend spent more than $1000 on weight loss techniques explained by online gurus,
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actually he should have
been
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consulted
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specialist greatly qualified in
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subject. It boils down
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not only health
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but
people
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's time and money are
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on
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by
avaoiding
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avoiding
your family physician. In summary,
people
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should follow
advise
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of
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a
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specialist
such
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as their regular doctor to avoid any long-term losses associated with alternative approaches.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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