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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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The
recnet
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recent
 trend of using alternative medicines and treatments
are
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 on
rise
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the rise
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 among
people
whom
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who
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 are suffering
health
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from health
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 issues.
In contrast
, these methods are not directed by their usual doctors. I think
,
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this
 is a negative development rather than a positive based on
points
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 I mentioned below. To support my thought, I want to mention the
Goverment
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Government
 of Ontario's advertisement to advise
people
 to see their medical professional for help rather
depend
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than depend
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 on online suggestions by some non-qualified person.
People
 tend to explore the quickest possible solution
,
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 and often fall for
the
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bad
advise
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.
Ultimetely
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Ultimately
, spiking up their health problems.
Additionally
,
people
 are investing their time and money
looking
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in looking
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 for
such
 pro tips in optimum time. My friend spent more than $1000 on weight loss techniques explained by online gurus,
where
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when
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 actually he should have
been
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consulted
the
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 specialist greatly qualified in
this
 subject. It boils down
that
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 not only health
,
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 but
people
's time and money are
also
 on
stack
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the stack
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 by
avaoiding
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avoiding
 your family physician. In summary,
people
 should follow
advise
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 of
the
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a
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 specialist
such
 as their regular doctor to avoid any long-term losses associated with alternative approaches.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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