Instructions Read the question below and write an opinion essay. You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task. Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan. Only then attempt to write this essay. Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, top
stars
who are in the field of acting
they
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are very conscious about their
buety
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beauty
,
Moreover
, they are concentrating on their remuneration rather than their succeeding goals which impact
on
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youngsters who admire them. I
this
forthcoming
eassy
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essay
easy
. I shall discuss my thoughts
why
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on why
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iam agreeing with
above
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statement.
To begin
with, In
this
modern
era
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few
well known
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well-known
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actors and
celebraties
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celebrities
are became
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are become
are becoming
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famous because of their appearance and money.
For example
, Some Instagram
stars
became overnight start by doing some videos.
Subsequently
, they
becoming
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stars
without achieving
anithing
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anything
and some individuals
doing
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do
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videos with their costly
cloths
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clothes
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,cars,etc.
However
, it is not an achievement.
Secondly
, Some youngsters admire their idols, they blindly follow their admired
starts
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stars
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. Which is not good for those who
follows
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them without thinking about their achievements.
For instance
, some
super
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superstars
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stars
are giving live examples and suggestions about
future
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the future
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without any knowledge, and their followers blindly believe them, which is not good for youth. In conclusion, those who recognise
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their talent and achievements are
the
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idols
for
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of
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young people
they
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should follow them, I agree with the
above mentioned
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statment
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statement
.
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