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Culture and education both play an important role with many countries, some say that preservation of culture has its features while others think that instead of culture people should focus on education in the country. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give examples and reasons to support your claims.

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Culture
 and
education
 are the pillars of any
country
 and play a vital role in most countries. Certain people think that the
country
's government should focus on
education
.
whereas
, some think that
culture
 should be the main target. In my opinion, it is best for a
country
 to target its
education
 and side by side focus on its
culture
also
. In forthcoming ,paragraphs we will discuss the above.
To begin
 with,
education
 is a must in today's modern scenario. As now to be a developed
country
, The
country
 must have a properly skilled and educated workforce.
Secondly
, to preserve any cultural features we must know about them which can easily be done with the help of
education
.
Thirdly
, From growing crops to building computers we all need to be educated properly so that we can take care of that
also
.
On the other hand
, Preserving a
country
's
culture
 is
also
 vital for the
country
. Every
country
 is different
according to
 its
culture
 if there is no difference in
culture
then
 it will be very hard to differentiate between countries.
Secondly
,
culture
 can be a promoter of the
country
's tourism. But it is next to impossible to handle international tourists without knowing and common language.
To conclude
, Prevention of
culture
 is important but it cannot be done without educating people about that.
Education
 plays a vital role in all of
this
as well as
 in the development of the
overall
country
. In my opinion, the
country
 should mainly focus on
education
 so that it can prevent its
culture
.
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