We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is undoubtedly certain that humans are not able to give their hands to everyone around the world. That’s why some people believe that we are responsible to help only the community around us. For me, it is true to a certain extent, and I cannot completely agree with that point of view. Nowadays, society in every
country
is facing different kinds of problems, even rich
countries
have homeless people. That’s why it is not possible to give hands to everyone in the world. No
country
has an obligation to help other nations, they should prioritise handling their own difficulties first.
However
, other
countries
cannot blame for that since it is their right.
For example
, during Covid 19 outbreak around the world, China sold their vaccinations to other
countries
only after all its citizens had been vaccinated. It is fair to make sure its citizens’ safety first rather than prioritising other
countries
.
Therefore
,
it is clear that
we should support and protect our communities as a priority.
On the other hand
, it is vital to help each other if we can, despite being the same nationality, citizens or not. The more we help, the more appreciation we can get which can give delight.
For example
, if one of the developing
countries
is suffering from a disease, and if the rich
country
has vaccines for
this
disease, it should sell or donate to that
country
to save lives. As human beings, neglecting other people’s difficulties is a harsh manner and we should help as much as we can. By doing so, everyone can be a good member of society. In conclusion, even though we should support our communities
first,
we should
also
give hands to the society that really needs us.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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