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The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate that one is
town
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center
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centre
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 at present and the other is a renovation plan
of
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for
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 Islip town
center
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centre
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. Some infrastructures and dual carriageways are added to
a
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the
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 development plan. To start at present, to focus on
main
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the main
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road
, there are shops on both north and south of it.
Housings
 are located
the
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in the
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 south part of
main
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the main
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road
. The park is placed
the
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on the
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 east side of
housing
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the housing
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 and the school is
in
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on
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 the west-south of
main
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the main
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road
. The main
road
 is
conected
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connected
 to the school and the park. From a map of
planned
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the planned
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 development, shops
of
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on
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 the north side of
main
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the main
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road
 will be divided into 4 parts, each
are
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is
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 bus station, shopping
center
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centre
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, parking lot and new housing. The
center
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centre
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 of
main
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the main
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road
 will be changed for pedestrians to walk only. But, the south shops of
main
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the main
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road
 will keep remained on their places. Dual carriageways will be constructed and these will surround
town
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the town
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center
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centre
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. Park will be
at
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apply
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inside
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the inside
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 of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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 and
school
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the school
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 will be
at
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apply
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outside
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the outside
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 of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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. One of
housings
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the housings
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 and new
housings
 will be located inner side of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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 and one of
housings
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the housings
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 which
is
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are
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 located at the bottom part of
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the center
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center
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centre
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 will be located at
outer
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the outer
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 part of
carriageway
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the carriageway
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words center, road, housings, carriageway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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