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*More and more people are relying on the private car as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest at least one possible solution*

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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of
fashion
 clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?agree 100% because the psychological
person
are
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 inclined to repeat after society, many experiments and articles talk about
this
 sometimes it's frustrating because it kills a
person
's individuality
him
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 own self but I think it can be overcome and about repeating the
fashion
 in terms of clothing the idea is bad because
in
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 my opinion, modern
fashion
 is just slag and bad taste you should always do something invent
fashion
 so to speak I would like to note that there are exceptions in which a
person
 can copy the speech, movements, character of a
person
 if he likes a
person
 or he is in love with him a
person
 dominates and
therefore
 they repeat after him In
conclusion
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 I wanna say.You must do what you want and stop
follow
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following
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the
fashion
.You must
choice
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 your own style and clothes And you must
to
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apply
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be and not seem to be . It is your own life your own character your own style
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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