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The plans below show student accommodation buildings in 2010 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The plans illustrate the pupil residence construction from 2010 until the present.
Overall
,
although
 the layout of
building
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the building
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 has been changed slightly, the number of
student
 bedrooms has increased significantly.
Moreover
, the noticeable parts of
garden
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the garden
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 have been altered to car parking and the
student
 bedroom.
According to
 these layouts after the main entrance, the space of
hallway
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the hallway
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 has been declined
due to
 the addition of an en-suite room.
Also
,
besides
 of main entrance has been added a large car parking lot
instead
 of the south garden. The bathroom and two
student
 bedrooms in
front
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the front
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 and beside of main entrance without any change have remained now.
In addition
, the north of
building
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the building
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 has been changed significantly
such
 as
,
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 converting the living room to the
student
 bedroom and a new
student
 bedroom has been replaced with the garden in the north of
building
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.
As well as
 now students are able to do social activities
in addition
 to cooking in the kitchen area.
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