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List of causes and effects of global warming. Often that might slow or stop the problem associated with him.

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Global warming is
unusually
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an unusually
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 rapid increase in the temperature
on
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 the earth. The main reason for global warming is human activities
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 as deforestation and the burning of fissile fuels that have detrimental effects on the
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ecosystem. In
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 ,essay I will discuss the main factors behind the temperature rise on the globe with relevant examples. To commence with, human activities
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 as deforestation.
Plants
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 are
tha
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the
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of
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 consuming co2 from the air.
Plants
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 intake co2 and exhale oxygen gas into the atmosphere. That
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 the
level
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 of temperature but in
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 present day,
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plants
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 on
earth
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 co2
level
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 is increasing.
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, factories and automobile vehicles exhaust fumes and smoke into the air
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 increases the concentration of CFCS. Greenhouse gases have been damaging the Ozone layer. It protects
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human from ultraviolet rays from the sun that causes acute and chronic diseases
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 as eyesight problems and cancer. When
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level
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 of heat rises on the surface. Polar ice caps start to melt
that
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 leads to floods and droughts. Floods destruct crops and habitats of numerous people. They face financial difficulties and become homeless.
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,
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level
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 of sea rises and
effect
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 on water bodies
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 as difficulties in reproduction and low puberty rate and most of them become extinct.
Thsi
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This
 problem can
be mitigate
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 by Coordination between government and individuals. Government implement laws on factories and vehicles they always use good
qualities
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quality
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 oil. Invest more in renewable resources
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 as wind and water.
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, greenhouse gases have been increasing
into
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 the air and
rises
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earth's
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 temperatures. It can be controlled by human actions they grow more
plants
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 and avoid cutting trees.
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