As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The invention of electronic

devices

such

as computers and televisions makes

people

move less, which has a negative impact on their

health

. I am completely agreed and think the newest

devices

are distracting

people

,

also

, posing some serious threats to

people

's well-being.

First,

people

have always been distracted by technology, but with the invention of

devices

like smartphones and laptops,

this

has become even more prevalent. Cell phones, laptops, and other electronic

devices

can be major distractions technologies, often causing

people

to lose focus on what they’re doing.

For instance

, in work and study settings,

people

are often interrupted by notifications or emails, which can take away from their productivity. After

invention

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of

smartphones

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society has become more distracted by these than anything else.

Secondly

, the latest technologies can keep silent as long as their parents want,

however

, because of

this

long hours of screen time can cause

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health

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issues and gaining weight. Children started spending nearly all of their sedentary time

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playing video games or watching television.

This

encourages mindless snacking, which ends up causing significant weight gain.

Additionally

,

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excessive use of phones may lead to some concerning

health

problems

such

as poor posture or neck pain and It is worse if you are in

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of maturing.

For example

, researchers have found a strong link between

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of exercise

due to

excessive computer and television use to obesity in children.

To conclude

, I strongly believe that new gadgets

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procrastinating and leads to some serious

health

issue