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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country. Write your response not less than 250 words. You get 40 minutes to complete this task

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Nowadays, most communities are going to foreign
country
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 for either studying
and
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 looking for a job for significant periods of time.
While
 some folks believed that they are benefited by doing
this
, others argued that they suffer some problems
of
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from
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 living abroad.
This
 essay will examine the benefits and drawbacks of residing and working in
a
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 international
country
.
To begin
 with, there are several advantages of staying and being employed in a non-native
country
.
Firstly
, students will be becoming independent
person
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people
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 and learn how to tackle problems by themselves. To illustrate
this
, an Indian student will learn how to cook their own
foods
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, and how to follow their daily schedules by living alone in a foreign nation.
Secondly
, young
people
 will complete their dreams by working in an international company.
As a result
, they can help their family by providing some money and other valuable items, which are really helpful for them.
Lastly
,
people
 who live in an abroad city
,
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 will call
to
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their family for visiting and enjoying the culture and the atmosphere of an international
country
.
On the other hand
,
people
 contended that living and working in a foreign
country
 has a number of disadvantages. One problem is that overseas students cannot enjoy the remarkable moments that they enjoyed with their loved ones when they were in their native place. Plus, they
also
 claim that they even work
as
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a
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part-time on weekends to
fulfill
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 their dreams. Another downside is that a group of
people
 argued that the medical systems of an international
country
is
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 very slow compared to their own
country
.
Therefore
, they need to wait for an appointment
at
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 least a couple of days. In conclusion,
while
 going
to
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abroad for studying and working has its own advantages, it can
also
 lead to
problematic
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to
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 those
people
 who live there.
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