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A friend has offered you some work in his company. You are currently employed and not able to start for 3 months. Write a reply to your friend. In your letter : Give details about what you know about the company. Explain your current situation. Give your answer to the offer and explain why

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Dear
Suresh
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Suresh,
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 How are you? Hope everyone's fine at home. It's a pleasure to get a letter from you. At the onset, let me thank you for remembering my request to find
a
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oportunity
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opportunity
 in your
company
 and arranging for an offer for me. It would definitely be a great experience for me to work in one of the Big 4 companies. I know that the net worth of your
company
 is 200 billion, having a profit margin of almost 25-30 % every year. Working at
such
place
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 would not
give
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only give
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 me
an
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apply
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exposure
about
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 the market situation but I would
also
 get a chance to mingle with a group of experienced people in the industry. At present, I'm a part of one of the important overseas projects of my current
company
 and I have a key role to play in the
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decision making
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 processes. I would love to accept the offer and join immediately,
nonetheless
due to
 my current
committments
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commitments
, I would be able to join your
company
 only in the month of August, after serving my notice period of three months. Rest assured that I
would
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 surely honour the offer and join you at the earliest. Thanks again for all your efforts. Convey my best regards to Malini and my love to Anirudh. Take care !! Akash
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