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Some people believe that exercise is the key to good health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both side and give your opinion.

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In modern days, activity and
diet
 is plays an important role from day to day
behavior
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 and provide strength and a lot of goodness. It is often argued by some that task is most beneficial, it develops functional organs and maintains body fitness. Meanwhile, others argue that a balanced
diet
 is more helpful,
it
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 provides
high
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 rich nutrients.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of
argument
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 before reaching a logical opinion in the following paragraphs. Based on my knowledge, the former group focuses that regular act enables them to live or life free from diseases. As few
nation
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 indulge themselves in activities
such
 as jogging, walking, cycling and swimming, they burn excess calories and
this
 helps them to lose weight and more merits for mind and body organs.
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, a survey conducted by the World Health Ministry revealed that geriatric persons who suffer
modern
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behavior
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behaviour
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 like obesity, hypertension and diabetes mellitus because they are practising walking and maintaining day-to-day warm-up action to control the disease level and
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state
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the state
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 of health.
Hence
,
workout
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workouts
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 play an important role in maintaining
a
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healthy
behavior
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.
While
on the other hand
, the advocates of the idea that having a balanced
diet
 is even more significant. Most of the reason why they think
is
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 because of poor quality foods that
public
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the public
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 consume these days. In many markets or shopping malls, organic food products and food which are free from chemicals are hardly found.
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, Many Researches have proven that a
diet
 which is balanced in vitamins and minerals, which is free from any chemicals is essential to keep
public
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 healthy.
Thus
, nutrients based
diet
 is more helpful to ensure good health.
However
, in my
opinion
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 both performance and a balanced
diet
 are extremely beneficial on their own ways. It is a matter of choice, like in which pattern
they
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 population are more comfortable.
To conclude
, having the habit of lesson and nutrients foods makes you a healthy
behavior
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behaviour
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. But activity is maintained
functional
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by functional
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 body organs and fitness free
live
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life
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 lifelong.
Although
, I should accept the fact that
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problem is more important in
this
 case.
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