The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below show an industrial area in town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The
map
illustrate
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that
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Norbiton industrial area and the planning in the future.
It is clear that
compared to the current layout,
this
field
wil
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more
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convinient
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convenient
in the future.
Crrently
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, the main
sapce
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is at the south northern part which
have
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numorous
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numerous
factories around the roundabout. The town is
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the west side of
map
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and remote to
roundabout
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the roundabout
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. There is a main road at the bottom of the
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.
Besides
, the wild farmland is on the north nearly a long river.
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the new layout, there are many housing will be built
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instead
of factories. Between two roundabouts, the shops and medical centre will be installed. And
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two
neccessories
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accessories
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instructures
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instructors
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structures
, playground and school will be set up of the east part of
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.
Desipte
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Despite
this
, there is a bridge on the brook
and
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lead
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us to the housing in the farmland.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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