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In some cultures, understand that children can achieve anything if they try hard what are the advantages of disadvantages of this?

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Nowadays, in different societies, children are motivated and persuaded that they can achieve everything they are wishing, but they have to
work
 hard in order to achieve it. Both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 view will be discussed soon. On the one hand, if kids are told so, they would get more motivation for their
work
, especially if the person who is motivating them is their family because they have the most influence over a person
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 in childhood. Another key factor is that they are thought that if they try hard enough, they will see the results sooner or later because god is fair,
thus
 they don’t get disappointed in their
work
 and they always have hope and motivation.
On the other hand
, some people think more realistic and say that working hard doesn’t
neccessirly
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necessarily
 mean a better
result
 but working smart is better. In their
defense
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 they say imagine if somebody has to deliver a text message the hard-working way is to walk and deliver it to their destination,
however
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 working smart means that they pick their phone up and send that message easily by their phone. Another reason they insist on is that sometimes working hard
don’t
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 give kids the
result
 they are willing,
hence
 it will end up a massive failure to them and that child will stop trying in the future and will always remember
its
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 failure
as a
result
 of working hard. To sum it up, working hard can have its own benefits
,
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 if every kid is thought how to
work
 hard effectively and get the demanding
result
, but if adults only encourage
childs
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children
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 to
working
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 hard only
than
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this
 will end up in
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the childs
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childs
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child's
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 disappointment.
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