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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Contributing to society voluntarily is a good way to give back to the
community
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. People argue that high schools must integrate free
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service
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 into educational programmes. I disagree with
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 opinion as the
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’ time is already occupied with their studies and unpaid
community
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service
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 should be carried out on their own accord without any pressure and enforcement. Everyone should have a right to make their own decision and enforcement is clearly breaking basic human rights.
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, high
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students
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 should have their own authority to decide whether to contribute free
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service
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. Forcing young people to do something they dislike can lead to resentment and dissatisfaction towards the
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 and their elders. Structuring the high
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 programmes in a way to include voluntary
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 is impractical and unreasonable.
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students
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 require to dedicate long hours to their studies. High
school
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 is the critical period for
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 to
study
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 hard for their university entrance exam. If they didn’t allocate enough time for
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, they would miss the opportunity to attend their dream university.
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high
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students
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 spend most of their time in the classroom and they need enough rest to focus on their
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. Unpaid voluntary work on top of studying and
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 can be overwhelming for most
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.
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,
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 should choose how they want to spend their spend after their busy
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 schedule. They may not be willing to do
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 work and
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, they probably want to do their hobbies
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 and mingle with friends and family.
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,
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 voluntary
community
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service
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 is a good thing to do, studying is more important in higher education for university entrance.
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, everyone should have the right to decide whether to do unpaid
community
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service
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 or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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