Buying things on the internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.

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Shopping is the initial part of our
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to
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our necessities. Buying things online,
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as hard-copy materials, air tickets and staple food, is becoming more and more rewarding. In my point of view, I do believe that online shopping is more beneficial than
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shopping.
Brick-and-mortar
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store
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is the conventional one that applies for
customers
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to come directly to the
store
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and give them more chances to elevate the things that they want to need, which means they need a lot of time to choose and pick the items that they really want to buy.
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, it is not sufficient enough for
customers
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if they want to buy air tickets because they have to be in line and
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buying books in a flea market as a part of an
offline
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store
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would be tiring because the sellers and
customers
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must search the books from beneath of the books and make a bargain.
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, online shopping is the best option for
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in terms of time-consuming. We can shop for anything through our
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without hassle. Unlike
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stores, the products that we could get did not meet the expectation of
customers
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,
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instance
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fresh products
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as vegetables and fruit. It seems to be bruised easier especially if the
store
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was not having
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good packaging and
delivering
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. Economic analysts state that online shoppers seem to be more common than
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decades before. It
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of the time-consuming that we need
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less than
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on brick-and-mortar
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store
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. In conclusion, in my point of view, I do believe that online shopping is more beneficial than
offline
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stores. It is because of the time-management that I have to make properly and for some products it is damageable for buying them via online stores.
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