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Do you agree or disagree that in the near future the role of teachers will be taken by the technology?

#future #role #teachers #technology
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The rapid advancements in science and the advent of
technologies
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 as artificial intelligence and cellular networks have drastically altered our way of life. The
education
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 systems and
teachers
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 are
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 affected by these developments, and some even worry that the future of
education
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 will
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 be reliant on technology rather than educators and tutors. In
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 essay,
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, I will discuss reasons corroborating my argument that
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 a conclusion may be drawn from faulty assumptions. Those keen to believe that
technologies
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 will completely replace traditional
education
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 in the near future usually point out the superiority of artificial intelligence in computationally intensive tasks. Namely, providing
students
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 with a plethora of resources to read or outlining the key points of an
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, these enthusiasts fail to pay attention to other areas in that humans far outperform
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,
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, sympathy and understanding individuals. A comprehensive
education
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 system does not necessarily mean throwing resources at the
students
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.
Teachers
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 are trusted with not only being able to convey complex concepts to the pupils but
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 understanding their psychologies and personality traits. The more educators are aware of
students
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' aptitudes, the better the response to
students
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' specific and individual needs;
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, the need for a sense of empathy, care, and emotions. Another point to consider would be that not all
students
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 come from similar backgrounds and with somewhat the same capabilities. There are children with learning disabilities,
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, dyslexia and ADHD.
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, others might come from unprivileged backgrounds and abusive households and
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 need more attention or even an individualized curriculum designed for their particular needs. In conclusion,
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technologies
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 can surpass humans in tasks that are computation oriented, there are areas in which human tutors and
teachers
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 are inherently better. In the foreseeable future, and as the pace of technological advancements increases, there will be a more conspicuous need for human-centred
education
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 systems, and
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, a more apparent demand for
teachers
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.
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