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Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#religion #schools
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Religion
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 has always been a very sensitive topic in our society. Some people argue that
school
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 subjects with
regards
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 to
religion
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 should be avoided.
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, in my
opinion
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religion
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 should be part of
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school
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the school
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 curriculum. On the one hand, groups that are in
favor
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 of removing
religion
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 classes in
school
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 believe that it creates conflict among
students
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 with different beliefs. They think that
students
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 must be free from religious pressure and have the free will to choose what they want to follow. Certain
schools
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, that accepts multi-cultural
students
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, do not provide subjects with regards to
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.
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, there are institutions like catholic
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 that can freely
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 their faith
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 their
students
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.
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, I strongly agree that
religion
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 should be included in
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 programs. Contrary to what other people say, teaching
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 in
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 can make the
students
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be
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more aware of other’s faith.
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, no matter what type of
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religion
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 subjects is offered, they all discuss how to be
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 and good person which I think
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 excellent way to shape the children’s character.
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, teaching
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 subject does not necessarily mean that the children are forced to follow the specific type of
religion
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 being taught. That being said,
schools
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 must be cautious with
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 aspect and be respectful
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 other student’s beliefs. On the final note, I believed that
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 helps
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 of
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 character on the basis of being good
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 must be taught in
schools
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however
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 respect must be in place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • religious education
  • multi-faith society
  • values and ethics
  • tolerance
  • diversity
  • religious freedom
  • secular education
  • curriculum
  • worldviews
  • interfaith dialogue
  • religious literacy
  • moral guidance
  • cultural understanding
  • critical thinking
  • respect
  • indoctrination
  • religious beliefs
  • secular state
  • religious extremism
  • academic subject
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