The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.

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The maps compare the Norbition industrial area now and the planned future development of the site.

Overall

, the industrial area will usher in some changes and has

also

seen the addition of new facilities

such

as shops, a medical

centre

, a playground and a school. Lying north of the city

centre

, a road will expand and the original river will be divided into two halves. The initial factories are reconstructed into housings and their geographical location has undergone slight changes. Shops and a new medical

centre

will be added on the left and right sides of the city

centre

separately. On the northwest side of the

centre

, the new load will be set in the future. The farmland will be established in the top right-hand corner of the city

centre

Finally

, the factory on the eastern edge of the area will be transformed into a school and the new playground will be built in the northern part of the middle entrance which was connecting the school and the central road.

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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.

The arts, including art, music and theatre are considered to be important in society. Do you think the arts still have a place amongst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in the school curriculum?

In their advertising businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negeztive development?

Planting trees is very important for the environment. Som people says trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while other says housing facilities should be build instead.

Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?