The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.

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The maps compare the Norbition industrial area now and the planned future development of the site.

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, the industrial area will usher in some changes and has

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seen the addition of new facilities

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as shops, a medical

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, a playground and a school. Lying north of the city

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, a road will expand and the original river will be divided into two halves. The initial factories are reconstructed into housings and their geographical location has undergone slight changes. Shops and a new medical

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will be added on the left and right sides of the city

centre

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separately. On the northwest side of the

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, the new load will be set in the future. The farmland will be established in the top right-hand corner of the city

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, the factory on the eastern edge of the area will be transformed into a school and the new playground will be built in the northern part of the middle entrance which was connecting the school and the central road.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

170 words

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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition, and planned future development of the site.

Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Women and man are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, some people believe that it is right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some working parents believe childcare centers can provide the best care for their children. Others believe that family members like grandparents can do a better job. Discuss both view and give your opinion

The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom of the security of society. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?