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Pie charts show main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

Pie charts show main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.
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The given part charts give information about the primary reasons for
immigration
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 and migration in the
UK
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 in the year 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 a definite job and looking for work were the main reasons that
people
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 came to and left the
UK
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. Having a definite job consisted of 30% of
immigration
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 to the
UK
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, compared to emigration, at 29%. 22% of
people
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 who migrated from the
UK
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 were looking for a job.
However
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, the proportion of
people
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 entering the
UK
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 for
this
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 purpose was 12%. The percentages of
people
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 who moved to join a family were almost similar with 15% for
immigration
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 and 13% for migration.
Although
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 a significant number of
people
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, 26%, entered the
UK
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 for formal study, only 4% of migrants were those who left the
UK
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 for
this
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 goal.
While
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 a total of 32% of
people
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 gave other reasons or did not give a reason why they emigrated,
this
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 accounted for 17% of
people
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 in
immigration
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words immigration, uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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