Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that we space programs should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

For a long
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people thought that outer space consisted of a sun, thousands of stars and a moon, which did not seem that important to explore. But as more and more exploration
were
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done the scientists
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found more about our
planet
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creation and raised a debate of if other
planets
could be new potentially livable
planets
. For some it was exciting and for
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it seemed
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a waste of a lot of money which could be used in
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other areas. In
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I will give some points on whether the explorations should be continued or not. On one hand, explorations are beneficial for resources found on other
planets
and
foreseeing
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future events. The trained professionals fly to other
planets
to explore the landscapes and take samples of minerals. These minerals are
then
tested on the
earth
for signs of life.
Moreover
, some materials which could be abundant on the
earth
could even have potential use for electricity like rare
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of hydrogen or building materials.
Furthermore
, scientists not only send out humans to expeditions
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but telescopes and other robots too. These could help to detect incoming meteors, which can give
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to prepare for
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arrival or to plan
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destruction before it hits the
earth
and causes a lot of damage.
On the other hand
, these types of explorations could seem very costly and the money could be spent
elsewhere
,
for example
, on saving the environment, which was a problem for a long time. People should put more thought into the planet we live
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today. Rising temperatures, massive floods and other natural disasters make
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more and more unlivable.
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needs to invest more money in research for more efficient trash recycling to save nature from pollution or in greener transport making and encourage people to travel by bikes,
electromobiles
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electromobility
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air pollution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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