Poor infrastructure hinders under-developed countries from progressing and modernizing. Some people think that it should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid.

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Some people believe that the
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progressing and modernizing in poor-developed
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, caused by bad infrastructure, has to be solved by foreign
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states
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, which are called “
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of the 3rd world” don’t have the opportunity to develop only using their resources, whether they are human or economic
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I’m going to support the idea of the given topic and provide some examples. First of all, under-developed
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are mostly African
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, which experience problems with the availability of education. Unfortunately, only the richest can afford to pay for university or even school for
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children.
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, the
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with poor infrastructure is directly linked
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a lack of specialists.
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information,
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foreign aid is vital in
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area
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because without external support,
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of the 3rd world will never progress at a normal pace and will always be outsiders.
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,
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states
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experience much more serious issues, which require immediate solutions,
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, the
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of poverty. More than
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half of
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the citizens
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of these
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live on the streets
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because they can’t afford any housing. So, infrastructure issues are not
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ones, so foreign support is vital in
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area.
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affairs of a particular state are only a
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of
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state, and foreign aid makes the receiving side a debtor.
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,
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of
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assistants can lead to a high level of dependence of a poorly developed country on a more developed one,
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in political terms. Taking into account
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fact, foreign help can damage the recipient, not help. In conclusion, I would like to say that, I believe that well-developed
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should take care of poor ones gratuitously, because supporting others only in terms of greed can lead to dramatic consequences.
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