In many parts of the world today, there is a profitable market for products which lighten or whiten people’s skin. Outline the reasons for using such products and discuss what effects they have in terms of health and society.

Nowadays, the cosmetic industry has been
beneficial
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market. Many
people
, all around the world, desire to lighten their
skin
. Media and old-fashioned beliefs are the main reasons for the
popularity
of those cosmetics.
This
trend has detrimental impacts on one’s
skin
health and society's economy. Many reasons encourage
people
to wear whitening
skin
products.
Firstly
, the media determined the beauty standard and persuaded individuals to use
this
type of
skin
care. As a case in point, advertisements on television and the Internet aim to lighten
skin
color
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. They compel
people
to follow a
western-like
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trend in which fair complexation is better than brown
skin
. I have seen an eye-catching advertisement on the Internet that noted that if you want to be the
center
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of attention, you can lighten your
skin
color
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colour
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with our production.
Second,
previous generations' mindset about
skin
color
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colour
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led to the
popularity
of having fair
skin
. To clarify, incorrect beliefs
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down from our ancestors about the priority of white-skinned dwellers. In the past,
high status
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citizens stayed inside, and their
skin
was whiter compared with
laborers
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and farmers who worked out.
As a result
of their high-status
work force
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, they were prone to the sun, and their
skin
got
burnned
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burned
ans
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and
tenacious. These days,
this
misjudgement causes
popularity
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the popularity
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of whitening
skin
productions
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.
People
's health and society's economy have been threatened by the privileging of wearing lightening
skin
cosmetics. Since most of those products contain toxins and harmful substances, their consumers are more likely to face
skin
cancer.
For instance
, my cousin was diagnosed with
skin
cancer after using whitening cream on a regular basis. Her doctor believed that her
skin
's melatonin was completely ruined by lightening cosmetics. The tendency to use these forms of
skin
production brings out a lack of budgets in many communities.
Due to
the fact that a large amount of society's revenue should be devoted to doing research on
this
type of cosmetic, most societies face economic issues. Manufactured
skin
production contains a wide variety of animal and human examinations.
Therefore
, their research is expensive. In conclusion, whitening
skin
becomes popular because of manipulating advertisements in the media and discriminatory
skin
color
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beliefs.
This
popularity
threatens one’s
skin
health
as well as
puts
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hefty pressure on the community's economy by providing budgets to meet expensive research.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skin lightening
  • Whitening products
  • Cultural standards
  • Beauty ideals
  • Media portrayal
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Colorism
  • Self-esteem
  • Toxic ingredients
  • Hydroquinone
  • Mercury
  • Melanin
  • Dermatological health
  • Consumer awareness
  • Regulatory bodies
  • Ethical marketing
  • Natural remedies
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