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It is irrefutable that there are many methods to control children's behaviour in today's modern world, some people choose physical punishment. Some parents believe that punishing children is the most effective way to manage kid's relationships. This essay will argue that spanking is not the best method for children's behaviour.

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It is irrefutable that there are many methods to control
children
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's behaviour in today's modern world, some people choose physical
punishment
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. Some
parents
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 believe that punishing
children
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 is the most effective way to manage kids' relationships.
This
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 essay will argue that spanking is not the best method for
children
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's behaviour.
To begin
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 with, I strongly disagree with the idea that some people can develop good discipline in
children
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 through corporal
punishment
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. One of the main reason is that punishing
children
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 have both physical and psychological effects.
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,
children
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 can get into difficult situations
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 of
punishment
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.
For instance
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, some research conducted in schools in one country has shown that a very high percentage of mental illness in
children
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 is the result of excessive physical
punishment
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.
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,
as a result
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 of punishments,
children
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 become depressed, turn to bad ways and even engage in criminal activities.
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, if
children
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 receive
punishment
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 from their
parents
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,
children
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's love for their
parents
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 will decrease and kids will start to hate them,
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while
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 too much
punishment
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 creates fear in the child and
this
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 situation leads to many bad outcomes.
Therefore
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, any way of
punishment
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,
such
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 as spanking and smacking can cause serious problems in
children
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.
On the other hand
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, some rightly point out that corporal
punishment
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also
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 has benefits for child's behaviour. Sometimes, the using of spanking in a loving relationship can be an effective parenting tool when it is beneficial for the child.
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, if
parents
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 choose to use spanking as a way for
children
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 to behave and be disciplined, it can cause
children
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 to be resolute and open-minded and believe that
this
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 situation is the best method for
children
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 o achieve their goals. In conclusion,
this
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 essay argued that hitting
children
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 is not the right method to do it because it shows many negative aspects. In my view, corporal
punishment
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 is irrelevant and excessive
punishment
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 for
children
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 as it relates to
children
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's health.

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