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Some people say companies should require all employees to wear uniforms at ‎work. Others think it is unnecessary. Discuss both views and give your own ‎opinion‎

#people #companies #employees #uniforms #‎work #‎opinion‎
No doubt,
uniform
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 is essential in some working sectors as it provides
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a diffenert
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diffenert
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different
 look .
Nevertheless
 , the
opponent's
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argu
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argue
 that they should be not
particular
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any particular
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uniform
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uniforms
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 for employees because sometimes
worker
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workers
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 can not feel comfortable
while
wareing
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wearing
uniform
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uniforms
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.
Therefore
 , both viewpoints
having
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their own
significant
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 and in
this
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i
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 will explain both of them
along with
 my opinion . To commence with
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 argument
that
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is that
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 there are few working
area
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areas
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 where
uniform
 is important like
for
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apply
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police officers , firefighters, and many others . Needless to say ,
due to
 give different personality in
this
 world ,so that
every one
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 can
easy
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 identify the person and stay alert .
Furthermore
 ,
uniform
 helps to remove discrimination among all
the
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apply
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workers .
Hence
 , they can
work
 together without having any fear in their mind related to
rich
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the rich
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 and poor
class
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classes
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as well as
 it helps to maintain
the
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equality among all the employees. On the opposite side , there is no need to wear
uniform
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 because
sometime
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sometimes
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 workers can not feel comfortable in
uniform
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a uniform
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 and it is
psychological
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a psychological
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 fact that when people are in their comfortable
suit
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suits
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,they can
work
 more
active
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actively
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 and
efficiently
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. As
the
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a
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 result , the outcome of the
work
 can
also
 come positive.
Apart from
this
 , if
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the worker
a worker
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worker
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workers
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 can feel comfortable and
relax
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relaxed
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while
 doing
work
then
 they definitely give their proper efforts as their
boby
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baby
 feel calm .
That is
 why,
their
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 should be
not
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no
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strickness
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strictness
slickness
 to ware
uniform
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uniforms
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.
To conclude
 ,
athough
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although
uniform
 is important in some working sectors to give
different
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a different
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 look and personality ,
however
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,however
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 I believe that there should
be not particularly suit
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be not particularly suited
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on
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in
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working
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the working
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 area
due to
 stay
clam
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calm
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 and
stress free
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stress-free
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 and they can
work
 more efficiently.
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