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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, However, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #lives #changes #change
Obviously, some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding
changes
, but others are like engines for
all around
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 transformations. It is upon everyone to choose what to do when your civilization
evolutionizes
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revolutionizes
revolutionized
: stand aside, go with the flow, get involved or lead a “revolution” in general. We can’t
not
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avoid the process of changing everything
during
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 our lives. They are our bodies, our knowledge and feelings, our surroundings, our environment. These transformations lead us to the basics that everything is not permanent and we need to be prepared for
changes
. Humankind develops from everything that I can mention like climate
changes
,
like
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the discovery of America, like Reformation and invention of printing,
like
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and
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 nowadays at
last
 political
changes
 in
neighboring
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neighbouring
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 countries.
Opinion
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The opinion
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 that change is always a good thing is
also
 wrong.
Changes
 can destabilize us in different ways. On one side can be stress, shock, panic,
fear
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and fear
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; from another - happiness, relief, excitement,
inspiration
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and inspiration
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. It depends sometimes on how we are informed and prepared for what happens. Those who get bad experiences, of course
they
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are afraid of accepting challenges, leading to fear of stress and depression, affecting their health in the long run. But everyone should be ready, even as you leave your home, your comfort zone, on a daily basis, you must realize that the world will not stand still for you. At the very least we need to understand, rest and peace
is
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are
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 as important for well-being as ongoing
changes
. We need just to measure and balance what is happening around
to
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us to
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 stay in the right direction.
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