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Some people believe schoolchildren should help to create rules in their schools. Others say teachers alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Rule
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 and regulations are mandatory in every sector of
this
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rule making
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 for
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 management,
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however
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 other schools of thought emphasise
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educators
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 involvement only.
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 essay shed light upon both notions
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 my perspective. First and foremost, is it logical to allow
students
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 for
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 in
school
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? Of course yes. The most prominent reason is that the tutees are comparatively
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 than their trainers. Ultimately, by adopting their ingenious ideas in legislation, the academics become more
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 for them. It
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boost
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up
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their
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 personality as, it enhances the confidence,
decision making
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 ability and leadership in scholars. Even more, it is more likely that if they decide the rules, they definitely follow them. Eventually, the
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 more disciplined. Moving
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, the role of teachers is undeniable
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 managing
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school
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schools
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 and
students
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. Since
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 instructors are more qualified so, they are fully aware
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 what can be beneficial for student’s academic development.
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,
students
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 prefer to bunk their lectures and attend
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 classes, but due to
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 of teachers, they attend all of their lectures.
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, it is essential for teachers to manage
school
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 to make progress from the learning aspect.
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, albeit people render distinct opinions about the
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 by
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.
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, I opine that both of them should decide
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 collectively because
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 it will assist
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students
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 personality
as well as
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 their academic credentials.
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