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The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.

The diagram below shows the water cycle, which is the continuous movement of water on, above and below the surface of the Earth.
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The diagram below shows the
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natural process
proccess
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that
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of
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 the
water
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 cycle , which is the continuous movement of
water
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 on, above and below the surface of the Earth. In the
diagram
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diagram,
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 we can see that the
water
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regular
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 comes back from
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ocean
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the ocean
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 to
ocean
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 by
water
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 cycle and how we know it is the natural
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proccess
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process
. First of all, the
ocean
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 contributes about 80% of total
water
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 and vapour in air and by
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a sunny
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 day and it becomes the condensing
water
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 vapour. From
this
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 condensing
water
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 vapour goes to place where there are
mouniains
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mountains
 where will be
repcipitation
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reprecipitation
precipitation
from the Could Formation to lakes. And it becomes the groundwater. Following that the snow on mountains melts to Surface runoff and goes to
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the
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Impervious layer.
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, the
water
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 melts to Salt
Water
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 to
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the ocean
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ocean
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the ocean
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 and it
repeads
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repeats
everytime
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every time
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process
proccess
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process
.
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, we see in
diagram
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the diagram
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 the
water
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 cycle and that it continuous movement of
water
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 on and know that the
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proccess
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process
 is renewable and
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 that we have to save the
ocean
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, lakes or rivers from
polution
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pollution
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proccess, water, ocean with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaporation
  • transpiration
  • condensation
  • precipitation
  • aquifers
  • percolation
  • surface runoff
  • replenishing
  • infiltrates
  • atmosphere
  • vapor
  • liquid
  • cycle
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