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Some people think computer games have negative impacts on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Children
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 are the building blocks of a country's development.
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, there lesuire times activities are a hot topic for many . It is believed by some that computer
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 have detrimental effects .In my opinion, undoubtedly there are few
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 that have a negative impact but many play a crucial role in
children
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's learning cycle On the one hand animations , colourful objects and songs help
children
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 to absorb new lessons easily
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 of one hour of boring lectures .It helps to improve concentration levels. Many schools are thinking to replace their early-age curriculum with tablet-based gaming. Not only for
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 there are many
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 designed to improve keyboard typing .Multiple companies have designed indoor
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 to evaluate a suitable candidate .
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, IBM a multinational firm is using
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 to check the IQ of the candidate .
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, there are many
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 that contain content of violence and vulgarity .
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,
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 are addictive .
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,
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 miss their homework and assignments .
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 to
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 too many moving objects can be detrimental for
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 .
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 PUBG took many teenagers on the verge of committing felony . Many teens are involved in killings and petty crimes
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 game.People who become addicted to these
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 reduce physical activities or outdoor gaming . In conclusion ,
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 can be reiterated there are pros and cons of
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 but excess of these can bring harmful impacts .
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, parents and teachers can use real-life examples to help them find the right use of these online
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 .
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