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Nowadays more and more business meetings and business trainings are taking place online. 🔸Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#business #meetings #trainings #place #🔸do #development
Yes,
now a days
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nowadays
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 business
metting
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meetings
meeting
 and
trainings
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training
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 are conducting in through online only.
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 the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 entered in world
people
 are don't wanted to come outside and they used to set
infront
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in front
 of
there
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their
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 desktops and loptops. They are attending
for
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apply
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meetings. Not only
a
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business
mettings
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meetings
meeting
 and
also
 students
are
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attending classes and sessions are
also
in
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online.
Yes
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 there are some advantages. Through online like
people
 are simply sitting and attend the meeting they don't move and travel
to
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from
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 one place to another place
that
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 is
the
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advantage
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 for everyone.
Yes
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 there are some disadvantages
those
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apply
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are
like
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as
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 if
people
 are simply sitting in homes
the
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people
 are addicted to
sit
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sitting
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 and
do
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doing
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 work. If
people
are
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apply
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come outside and
doing
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do
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there
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their
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 works it's
a
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good health like some
of
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apply
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vitamins
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the vitamins
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 are
follen
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fallen
on
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in
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there
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their
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 body and arms it's good for
there
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their
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 health only.
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