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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#cars #increases #money #road #systems #people #government #drivers #costs
In the
manufactural
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 sector, the development of
road
 systems is crucial
together with
 an increment in the number of cars owned by people.
While
 some people believe that
the
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road
 construction is the
responsibility
 of the
government
 to handle it, but
the
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others feel that it is the
responsibility
 of the
car
 owner. On the one hand, developing
of
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road
condition
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conditions
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 is essential to be executed by authorities because the implementation will be more structural and they have a large amount of
fund
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funds
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. The
government
 has
a
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the
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 power to control
in
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apply
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many
of
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institution
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institutions
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that
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related to
highway
 construction since they are
supreme
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ruler
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rulers
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 of a country.
For example
, the
government
 probably can delegate the
responsibility
 of
road
 development to
the
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expert
agent
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agencies
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such
 as the
ministry
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Ministry
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 of public works to make up
project
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a project
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plan
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plans
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, budget
plan
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plans
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 and consolidation
role
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roles
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, structurally.
In addition
, the
government
 has a large amount of budget which is earned by
citizen
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citizens
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.
This
 is because the
car
 owner charged an exorbitant tax to the authority in order to own and drive
car
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a car
the car
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 on the
road
.
Therefore
, it is unfair if the
citizen
 has to
paid
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pay
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 for upgrading
road
 works.
On the other hand
, paying money for
road
 development is a consequence
from
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of
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 buying a
car
.
This
 is because if people buy a
car
, they have to
aware
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be aware
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about
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of
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 their
responsibility
 to
paid
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pay
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 several debts
particularly
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,particularly
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 for
road
 establishment.
In addition
, the
citizen
 is the main subject who absorb a lot of benefit of using
road
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the road
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. They
are usually use
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road
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the road
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 to travel to
another place
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other places
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in
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on
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 many occasions. To exemplify, the
citizen
 who use
highway
road
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roads
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everyday
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 since they want to arrive
in
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at
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 their destination easier and faster but it has to be supported with a good condition of
highway
 which aims to avoid a traffic accident. In conclusion, I am in favour of the opinion that developing
highway
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highways
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 should be executed by
government
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the government
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due to
 they have an opportunity to accomplish it in
term
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terms
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 of dominion and budget.
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