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Most countries offer free education through high school. Should university education also be free?

#countries #offer #education #school #university
In
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These
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these day
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, most
country
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countries
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 in the world offer no-fee study
education
 through
highschool
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high school
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. So a question is
release
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released
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:” yes or no the
university
 should be free for
student
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students
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?”. In my point of view, universities don’t have a duty to free their
education
. First of all, free
education
 may lead to low teaching quality because lecturers'
salary
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salaries
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 surely will decrease and experienced lecturers may abandon
university
 work and find another way to earn
money
 which will help them to survive in
the
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a
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 world where
money
 is an important transfer item.
Secondly
, if universities don’t require
money
 for
education
, they will not have enough
money
 to repair infrastructure when it breaks down or expires. It will be hard for students to study in case there is less technology to support teaching progress.
Thirdly
, universities will need an amount of government
money
 to pay lecturers and
government
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the government
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 will need to reduce
supporting
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money
 for other social fields like poverty or war. Fourthly,
university
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universities
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normally
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are normally
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 for
student
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a student
the student
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 who
want
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wants
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 higher
education
 and
want
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wants
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 to spend
money
 to have it.
Worker
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Workers
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 don’t need to complete
university
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a university
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education
, they just need to complete
highschool
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high school
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 to get admission to working in it.
To sum up
,
university
education
 doesn't have to
free
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be free
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 their
education
 for students because it will waste their
money
 for nothing.
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