Many people say that we place too much importance on money and possessions. Others believe that the consumer society improves our quality of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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some
people
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believe that
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money
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has value in their
lives
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,
other
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others
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believe that spending
money
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that
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will enhance their
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standard
of
live
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living
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.
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, I am a strong
beliver
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believer
that
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to improve
people
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's
lives
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.
This
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for two many
resones
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reasons
resonates
,
people
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spend
time
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to improve
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improving
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their skills, and
to buy
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buying
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some
machain
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machine
that would help them in their
lives
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.
First,
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consumer society has
a
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signaficant
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significant
users who trying to build up their skills to have a vital role in their
lives
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.
In other words
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, when
people
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spend their
money
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to take courses to educate themselves, that would give them
opportunites
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opportunities
around the world to work at international companies, and
this
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will boost their
lives
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. A prime example is
that
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"Jordan",many young
people
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who improved their technology skills by taking various courses and degrees to work over the seas.
Thus
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,
consume
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consuming
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money
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for learning is a big investment for any person and it is better than
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saving
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the
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apply
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money
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.
Second,
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parchising
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purchasing
practising
modern
machains
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machines
to
safe
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save
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time
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and effort is not
wast
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waste
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of
money
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.
This
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means if
people
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spend extra
money
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to have these machines, that would
rais
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raise
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their quality of
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lives
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life
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.
For instance
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, when
familes
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families
are having a washing machine that would help
people
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to reduce
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time
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the time
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of house works and use
this
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time
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to relax or spend
a
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apply
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quality
time
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with
heir
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their
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children.
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, what can be said is that
utilize
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utilising
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money
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the money
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to enhance
the
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a
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person
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person's
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life is valuable. In conclusion,
after
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this
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essay has
manifasted
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manifested
the points mentioned above, it can be reiterated that spending
money
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to improve
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people
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lives
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has many beneficial
impact
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impacts
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.
Morever
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Moreover
, I am
conveinced
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convinced
that using
money
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waisly
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wisely
to have a
signaficant
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significant
life and
invaluable
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is invaluable
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.
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