Many people say that we place too much importance on money and possessions. Others believe that the consumer society improves our quality of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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consumer society has a
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significant
lives
. In other words
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spend their money
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opportunities
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people
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money
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money
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life
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Therefore
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the money
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a
person
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