The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Introduce the maps. Write what do they illustrate. Note the changes that occurred. Look attentively at the maps and note what was modified and what remained unchanged. Describe each element of the map in a separate paragraph. Tell about each element (farmland, car park, school etc) and its alteration. Use vocabulary for graph description and linking structures. Also see words from academic wordlist. Give a general overview. Write in brief about the changes.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Introduce the maps. Write what do they illustrate. Note the changes that occurred. Look attentively at the maps and note what was modified and what remained unchanged. Describe each element of the map in a separate paragraph. Tell about each element (farmland, car park, school etc) and its alteration. Use vocabulary for graph description and linking structures. Also see words from academic wordlist. Give a general overview. Write in brief about the changes.
INTRODUCTION: The diagram shareing the information about the west
park
secondary
school
construction in 1950. There are some changes in the
school
map. PARAGRAPH 1: In the
year
of 1950 there is main road. In the Northwest corner there are several
houses
.
Then
slite opposite of the
houses
there a
school
building. Coming to the south west corner there is a butiful farmlad. Moving forward there is a
playground
to play for
school
students
in south east it's
besides
to the
school
. Coming to
year
1980 there is some changes in
this
year
those are added
car
park
and science block. In the
year
2010 all are same in as in the 1980 PARAGRAPH 2:
Then
compared to the 1950 and 2010 there is some difference
that is
in the
year
of 1950 their is
Houses
in that place they are changed as a
car
park
PARAGRAPH 3:
Houses
: There are some
houses
in near the
school
. It is better for
students
who are living in the near by the
school
they will save some time to study
School
: The
school
is very important to study for every children. Farmland: There is one farmland
students
will enjoy some time in farmland to get there brains refresh.
Playground
:
Playground
is very important in the schools
students
have spend some time to do some physical exercise in the
playground
.
Car
park
: There a
car
park
in the
school
lectures who are having the motor vehicle to
park
. Conclusion: The
school
is the middle to the town it will help to go
students
are if they are come by bus or any other vehicle it is very easy to find the
school
and other surrounding areas. There is one main road near to the
school
.
Students
who are coming from so far and near by any places it is easy to come and go.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school, year, houses, playground, students, car with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.

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