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Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children’s story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people think reading story
books
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 is a waste of time for
children
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,
where
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whereas
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 during the growth period
children
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 should be advised to be more active with other
activities
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. Even though I agree that
children
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 should actively explore various
activities
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 as a fundamental thing, I think that reading
activities
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 are very important things to do. On the one hand, parents must direct their
children
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 to be active in outdoor
activities
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 and healthy exercise. The growing period is very important for
children
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 to try many positive things to strengthen their mental and physical. Exploratory
activities
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 will provide opportunities for
children
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 to recognize their talents and potential,
such
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 as painting and singing will
train
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 their artistic talents,
sports
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and sports
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such
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 as cycling, running, playing ball and swimming will nourish and strengthen their physical strength.
On the other hand
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, reading
books
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 cannot be said to be a waste of time. Reading is an activity
that is
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 very important for
children
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 to do from an early age and do it regularly.
This
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 is because reading is a successful key for every human being to understand a phenomenon and knowledge that will continue to be needed all the time. Reading story
books
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 is a very good start that parents can do to
train
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 their
children
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's critical thinking, one day the child will be able to distinguish between true and false information.
In addition
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,
children
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 will become concentrated and have excellent filters in managing the information they get. We see a lot of
children
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 who excel in academics
who
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and
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 have been interested in reading
books
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 regularly since they were
child
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children
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.
To conclude
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, I agree that at an early
age
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children
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 should explore a lot of various
activities
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 to
train
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 their talents, mentally and improve their physique.
However
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, reading story
books
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 should
also
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 be a top priority for
children
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 to
train
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 intelligence and critical thinking for their future.
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