Essay topics: Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The
zoo
always
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atractive
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attractive
for
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people, especially
for
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children. Some individuals consider that zoos are
harsh
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a harsh
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place for
animals
.
Nevertheless
,
other
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others
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believe that zoological gardens are profitable for rare
animals
. In
this
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I will discuss both sides of
this
issue and will include my own viewpoint.
First,
zoo
parks are the place where people can provide
good
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time with their children and loved ones.
Furthermore
, children learn
abour
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about
animals
theoreticaly
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theoretically
at
schools
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and
coming
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at
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zoo
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they can see
animals
closely.
Moreover
, some animal breeds are going to die out.
For instance
,
chita
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and lions extinct
last
decades. Keeping them in the
zoo
can save their
life
and living in the
zoo
can be useful for
animals
.
Zoo
employees can provide them with food and at the same time the
veterenarians
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veterinarians
veterinarian
can help weak
animals
. Turning to the other side of the argument, some people claim that
animals
should be in
natural
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habitat.
On the other hand
, they believe that keeping
animals
in
zoo
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at
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cases can shorten their
life
and
wild
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wildlife
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life
the
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real home for
itselves
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itself
.
Besides
, animal lovers think that, cases at
zoo
parks
limite
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limit
animals
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animals'
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freedom.
To conclude
all
above
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mentiond
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mentioned
, in my opinion,
zoo
gardens can protect
animals
from hunting and prolong their
life
. In
additionally
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, kids can see
animals
closely.
However
,
zoo
garden workers should take into consideration all about
animals
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animals'
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environment.
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