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Planting trees is very important .some people say that trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others says that housing facilities should be build instead. what is youropinion?

#trees #people #areas #cities #town #facilities #youropinion
It is indeed true that plants are essential to maintain the
earth
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 temperature meanwhile , some
people
 say that growing plant in
free
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area
 is
best
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 way to use the land in cities .
Nevertheless
, the opponents argue that government have to build
number
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 of houses over
their
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. Personally, I believe that both points
having
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 their own
significant
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 and in
this
essay
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 I will explain
the
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both sides
along with
 my opinion. To commence with
first
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 favour that
people
 have to increase tress in town and cities
area
 as it
help
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 to maintain the pollution level over there . Needless to say ,
due to
rising
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personal
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 vehicles in
these
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this area
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area
 the pollution level is rapidly
incline
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 side by side . To exemplify, it is proof that the noise and air pollution is more as
compare
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 to bygone days as everyone loves to use their own vehicle rather than public transport .
Consequently
, by
this
 global warming become a main
issus
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issues
issue
 these days ,which can solve by only planting .
On the other hand
 , the opponents think that government have to construct flats in
spare
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area
 to provide home
facilitites
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facilities
 to local
people
 as in the current time
periods
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people
 are homeless and mostly sleep on
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the road
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road side
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roadside
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.
As a result
, they face many
problem
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problems
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,
for example
 , in
india
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India
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 poor
people
 normally sleep
on
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in
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 the
footpark
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foot park
footmark
 because they
not
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do not
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 have any shelter to cover their
head
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heads
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 in cities
area
 .
Hence
 to cover the need
to
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of
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 these
people
 government have to build houses in
free
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the free
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area
 To
concluded
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,
although
 trees are important to balance the ecosystem
in
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at
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this
 time ,
however
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 it is very hard to ignore the need
to
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for
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 needy individuals , so
i
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I
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 am in
the
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apply
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favor
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 of
second
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a second
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 opinion.
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