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Some people think that it is a good idea to socialize with colleagues during evenings and weekends, others think it's important to keep working life sperate from social life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Man is a social being and tends to continually interact with others in the course of their life, a section
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 it's important to keep the
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 and social life
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 others think socializing with
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colleagues
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 after
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 and weekends is a great idea, in my opinion, it's proper to meet up with
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off
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 periods. Some people argue that it is necessary to distinguish between our
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 and social life
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 because they believe that if we don't,it will create complacency or
over familiarity
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 in the
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work
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 which will affect professionalism.
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, a manager of an establishment who regularly hangs out with his
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 runs the risk of lightening the strength of his authority as his subordinates now see him as a friend and not a boss.
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, others argue that being a team of friends in a
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work
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 helps every member of the team feel comfortable, and
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able to put in his best, as he is able to make contributions freely and see criticism in the proper light as it's coming from a friend and not someone he sees as a competitor.
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, we make time to socialize after
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 and now, we are so bounded, executing
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 together irrespective of who the credit goes to.
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 has greatly impacted our output that we have grown our branch from one branch to five branches within the state. In conclusion, everyone does better in a conducive environment, and hanging out with
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 helps creates a bond that makes our
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work
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place
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 less tense and a lovely
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 to be.

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