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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In most parts of the world, communities are
well paid
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. Some believe that providing good
wages
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 to
workers
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 is beneficial to the country. But some believe the government should limit how much money
workers
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 are paid. I believe that good salaries motivate
employees
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 to perform better and boost their self-confidence.
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, higher incomes make
employees
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 more committed to their employers and companies. When
employees
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 work harder and earn more money, their
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 performance improves. Ultimately, it affects the growth of companies and countries.
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, high salaries encourage a country to strive and improve its standard of living and discourage skilled
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 from leaving the state in search of higher salaries.
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, it is the right of
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 to receive adequate
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 commensurate with their skills and work. Others,
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, believe that the authorities should control the
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 paid to communities because it helps governments distribute wealth evenly across society. Giving more money makes the rich even richer.
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 activities will lead to the fact that the population will grow evenly and the people will be provided with equal opportunities in the long run.
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, wealth is
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 stopped from dominating certain strata of the community.
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, reducing thief activity and providing better lifestyles and healthcare. I believe the authorities should not limit the
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 of
employees
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. Because it hinders the diligence of
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 and is not good for the country. In conclusion, offering high
wages
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 will motivate them to work hard and lead a luxurious life.
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  • inequality
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