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Do you think a museum is to educate or entertain people?

#museum #people
A museum is a place that keeps valuable products related to the culture and history of the state. Most
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people has been using
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 as a picnic spot
while
 other learn about their ancestors' works. From my perspective,
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 educate the new generation about their history.I will discuss my pinpoint in a forthcoming paragraph. To commence with,
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 has been used for saves the human resources that they used in the past for their survival and
also
 reveal their forefather's skills they used in war and for protection. To dive into roots, a wheel was the first invention of a human that make their work easier. Nowadays, people get more ideas through wheels and making other convenient
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 and a bus. On the flip side, exhibitions are becoming more and more fascinating by their management and in
this
 day and out, individuals use the resume as a picnic sport.
For instance
, the Pakistan
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 Islamabad has a gallery that has all the events related to independence day as culture day statuses are representing
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 values of the moments that happened in a country. In my opinion,
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 should be constructed more by the administration to make it more attractive for the new generation and learn all the
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 information about their roots.
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 plays a crucial role in preserving ancient things. It provides details about the history
as well as
 a picnic spot for the tourist.
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